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Old 04-27-2010, 04:06 PM   #1
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Default The Taxi

I open the cold, metal door and step outside. The white light of the moon greets me, as does an owl, which hoots lightly at my presence. The road in front of me stretches for miles to the right, but turns off within 10 metres to the right. Across the street is a group of homeless people huddled around a bin fire.
Walking down the concrete steps that lead down from my office, I see a taxi driving towards me from the right, which I quickly hail; I jump in the backseat. Cold, cheap plastic seats great me.
"Where to buddy?" The driver asks.
"Anderson Street," I reply "Thankyou."

On the way home I gaze out of the window. The city is a wreck; homeless people cover the streets, crime is committed in the open and the police don't care. The city might as well be an anarchist state there is that much law and order.

The meter reads $27.55; I check my wallet. I only have $25. Nervously I begin contemplating the idea of running from the fee. I'm an honest man though. I know I shouldn't. What would my wife say if I tell her? What kind of example is this to my children? The meter now reads $31.
"Stop the car" I tell the cabby. He pulls over.
"Why? What's happed?"
"I only have $25, I can't afford anymore"
"Don't worry about it," He says, "We'll figure it out when we get to your house."
Reassured, I leant back and put my ipod in.

By the time we arrived at Anderson Street the meter read $42. I didn't know what I was going to do. The driver pulled the car up on the side of the road and locked the doors. I was very nervous by now.
"Umm, like I said before, I only have $25." I went to hand him the money. He glanced at it, a dissatisfied look on his face.
"No, no, no. Keep your money. I want your watch." He said.
"M-my watch?" I stuttered. "You can't have my watch, it cost me $300!"
He glared at me.
"Are you sure?" He asked. He put his hand in his pocket
"Yes" I said, defiantly.
"Well," he said, "That won't do"
In one move he pulled something out of his pocket and pointed it at me.
It was a gun.
Before I could react he had pulled the trigger.
I saw a flash of bright light, heard a great bang and felt what was like the biggest punch I had ever felt, with a hot centre. I doubled over in the seat, hand clutching my chest.
I lay there, writhing in agony, mouth agape but unable to mutter a word.
The door to the taxi was opened and I was thrown onto the rough concrete, my head striking the gutter. Darkness.

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Old 07-16-2010, 01:49 AM   #2
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That's a pretty good short story you've got here.
I don't have any real complaints, it's short, enjoyable and has a good amount of descriptions for a text of this length.
Keep writing more texts of this quality, and I will keep reading.
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Old 07-16-2010, 10:19 AM   #3
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Am i the only one who see all odd characters in that story since the changeover?
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Old 07-16-2010, 12:06 PM   #4
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It's not only you.
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Old 07-16-2010, 01:00 PM   #5
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Am i the only one who see all odd characters in that story since the changeover?

Agreed. That taxi driver was a pretty odd character...
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Old 07-16-2010, 11:28 PM   #6
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Haha i see what you did there.
I figured out that all the apostrophes and quotation marks were replaced by those weird characters. Wonder why this happened. Fixed now though
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